I've decided to participate. I have an inkling that my query for Never a Happy Ending could be better. I'm looking forward to your feedback.
Dear Ms. Agent,
Sixteen-year-old junk food enthusiast Amelia Taylor thought the worst thing that could ever happen to her was falling hard for two boys, but she was wrong. The day her father never came home was the worst day of her life.
People don’t usually go missing in the small town of Riverdale, Louisiana, where everyone knows your first and last name. Yet, no one has seen him since the day he left for work. At first, Amelia blames her momma for her father leaving them. He always said that she was the stubbornest woman he ever met.
Amelia soon realizes that even though her momma may be stubborn, neglectful, and cruel, she’s all she’s got now. Left to pick up the pieces and take care of her sick momma whose bad smoking habit has finally taken its toll on her, Amelia is forced to grow up quicker than she intended to. If it weren’t for her friends, her boyfriend, and sweet Tommy Baker, her childhood sweetheart, Amelia doesn’t know how she’d make it through this.
More than anything Amelia’s afraid that she might lose her momma to her illness, because of shame she won’t take any hospital care. Her only hope for redemption is by finding out what really happened to her father the day he left for work and never came home, and by getting her momma to see someone before it’s too late. Or she might lose everyone and everything she’s ever loved.
NEVER A HAPPY ENDING, my contemporary young adult novel, is complete at 43,000 words.
Thanks to everyone who critiqued my query. I've since revised again. I'd love to hear anyone's thoughts.
People don’t usually go missing in the small town of Riverdale, Louisiana, where everyone knows your first and last name. Yet, no one has seen sixteen-year-old Amelia Taylor’s father since the morning he left for work and never came home.
Amelia suspects that her momma had everything to do with it. Her father always said that she was the stubbornest woman he ever met. But as minutes turn into hours and hours into days without a word from him, Amelia begins to realize her momma’s all she’s got now.
Amelia’s forced to take care of her momma on her own. But behind the mask of perfection her momma wears for friends and neighbors lies a woman who’s abusive, pitiless, and secretly blames Amelia for her failing health and wrinkled skin, instead of the three packs of cigarettes she smokes every day. If it weren't for Amelia's friends, her boyfriend, and her childhood sweetheart, Tommy Baker, the boy she's still madly in love with, she doesn't know how she’d make it through this.
More than anything, Amelia’s afraid she might lose her momma, too, as her ill health worsens, and she refuses to see a doctor. Amelia knows that if she doesn’t get her momma to see someone, she just might lose everyone and everything she’s ever loved because with every passing second the thought of seeing her father alive again begins to seem impossible.